Scholarship essay #2
Published in Writing Samples on 6/11/2007
This scholarship essay addresses the following question: "Choose a book or books that have affected you deeply and explain why." In this case the applicant has chosen the novel Germinal by Emile Zola. The essay is strong and well-written although not without it's flaws. Immediately following the essay are some suggestions as to how the essay could have been improved.
At 13, I was an ordinary young teenage girl. I had my favorite movie stars, my secret 'crushes', and an overwhelming addiction to chocolate. School mattered very little to me and learning even less. I worried about getting good grades in school but only to please my parents. My happy little life consisted of sweet treats and even sweeter thoughts, an endless array of bite-sized banality. All of that changed the summer of my 13th year, the year my older sister went away to college.
I idolized my older sister. She was five years older than me and my link to the shadowy world of adulthood that seemed so out of my reach. When she went away, I was devastated. It was a very wet summer that year and one particularly rainy day, I was lying in her empty bed looking at the artifacts she had left behind, clutching an old sweater of hers. My eyes travelled around the room and came to rest on her bookshelf. For a reason that I will never be able to explain, I picked one volume up and began thumbing through it. It was Emile Zola's Germinal and it was to change my life forever.
Germinal woke me up from my slumber. I began to see the world around me, to look at it with new eyes. I always thought things like poverty, greed and unjustice happened elsewhere, to people that more or less deserved it. But the more I read about Etienne, Catherine, and the Vandame mine, the more I began to realize the universal nature of suffering. This is part of what makes Zola's novel a great work of art. It has the power to change the way you think while also being beautiful. I realized that there were actually striking miners in my own state. I then became an avid reader of newspapers and currrent events. I held a bakesale outside my school for the families of the miners. I didn't raise that much money but it felt good to at least to be doing something.
The affect Germinal had on me was not just limited to social awareness. I also became more aware of other literature, history, and art. I read other Zola novels which led me to discover Balzac and his wonderful books such as the sweet sad tale of Pere Goriot. I also became interested in the French Revolution in order to find out how the month of Germinal came to get it's name. When I learned that the young Zola was a early champion and admirer of Monet and the Impressionists, I began to notice art for the first time.
Now that I am getting ready for college, I feel the effect that Germinal had on me more than ever. I have read it three times since I first discovered it and each time I seem to learn new things.It isn't just that I have a pet rabbit named Poland or that I have a pen-pal who is an orphaned miner's daughter. It goes much deeper than that. Germinal has changed the way I look at myself and the world around me. No other book has done that.
Suggestions for improvement to be posted soon.
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